Steep hills surround us. I'm going so fast that my cheeks blow up like a balloon. Tight turn. I clutch the handle bars and push on the brakes as hard as I can. The leaves crunch as I race past.
All I can hear is Ollie and Isaac screaming as they go down the hill. Ollie and Isaac are in front of me and the rest are behind me so it's just me alone in the dark and scary forest with no one to be seen.
This term I have been learning about punctuation and structural hook building. I improved my writing by adding punctuation and improving my hooks so the reader will want to read more. My next step is to show not tell my emotion.